Deadline #4 HW #2 Grammar Assignment

The past grammar difficulties I have are usage of commas, sentence fragmentation, and sentence clarity. I used the Purdue Owl site to help me figure out my troubles. I looked at the comma webpage and found information on rules of commas. It gave me a basic concept of commas. I learned that commas turn sentences into manageable segments. I read through quick guide of commas and learned many different scenarios to use commas. I usually have problems putting commas on certain words in a sentence, and the guide told me that i need to put commas around the middle of a sentence to set off words that are not essential to the meaning of the sentence. I looked at the sentence fragmentation and was able to get a better understanding through the visual examples. The webpage had fragment sentences in red and underneath the sentence was corrected in blue. There was examples of sentence fragments with no main verb or subject which I was able to look at. The sentence clarity webpage had multiple examples of sentence clarity problems. I read through each example from old information to new information, active voice, parallel construction, and multiple negatives.

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/607/01/ (Commas)
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/600/01/ (Sentence Clarity)
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/620/01/ (Sentence Fragmentation)

Paragraph Revision (Journalism Discussion Question):
The evolution of self-regulation in movies from 1922 to 1956 started with the movie scandals of the 1920’s. Movie industry had two issues to face during the 1920’s, scandals with movie stars and movie content becoming too provocative. The movie star scandals started when comedian Roscoe Arbuckle had a party in San Francisco in 1921. During the party, model, Virginia Rappe was rushed to the hospital with stomach pains and eventually died there. Arbuckle was charged with murder. Tests revealed that Virginia had died due to a ruptured bladder. After three trials, Arbuckle was not found guilty.
After the trials, director William Desmond Taylor was found murdered at his home. One of Arbuckle’s friends, Mabel Normand was known as the last person to see William alive. After Mabel was cleared, people found out that “Taylor” was not his real name and was a part of a drug business. During this shocking news, the Catholic Legion of Decency boycotted all movies and Los Angeles (movies. Los Angeles) businessmen decided that Hollywood needed to be policed.

I learned how to fix some of my grammar difficulties through examples on the Purdue Owl site. I will continue to learn through my mistakes and hopefully produce an error free Research Project at the end of the semester.